Jewels of Feelings
Title: Jewels of Anxiety
Anxiety is not what is seems,
No rush of blood fills your body,
Nor butterflies crowding your stomach,
But rather a thousand pounding drums on your heart
Making you feel vulnerable and heavy.
Words that your lips can’t seem to expel,
Beads of sweat trickling down your face,
Anxiety peaks when your undeniably weak,
It rushes in like a thief in the night,
A thief that steals pleasure and peace.
Title: Jewels of Happiness
When you get the courage to rid yourself of the negative,
And embrace yourself with the positive,
When you have confidence to wear a smile,
And bid the frown you had on your face goodbye.
When you destroy your demons,
And stop listening to them,
When you listen to the angels,
That are always there cheering you on.
When you finally open your eyes to the beautiful world,
That is when you feel the wonderful sensation: Happiness.
Title: Jewels of Sadness
Sadness fills my heart and darkness blanks my mind,
The internal weeping begins,
As the black cloud covers my head.
Thoughts circulate my head,
Trying to figure out what stole my joy
And what shattered my heart.
Limping through the day,
As sadness lingers on the mind.
All that was beautiful once now feels dead,
But at least I know this sadness will soon fade.
Title: Jewels of Love
Love is an unexplainable feeling
Something that creates butterflies in your tummy,
And rattles your mind.
It can stem from simple words or a hug
Making your heart putter and smile appear,
Erasing all other thoughts with the replacement of one.
A simple unexplained feeling of love takes over,
Making you feel like a kid again,
With a carefree notion
That’s the unexplained feeling of love.
Title: Jewels of feelings
All these feelings are jewels on a crown,
We wear the crowns on a daily basis,
But only let certain jewels surface throughout the day.
Depending on what your crown carries,
New jewels can be added as you grow.
These jewels should not be hidden from the world,
But expressed in a common manner,
Everyone bears the weight of different jewels,
And each one is noble enough to be shown
So wear the crown high and explore the feelings.
Andrew Lange
Jessica,
First of all, I wanted to say I very much appreciated and enjoyed your style of organization; it makes your collection both fun and easy to read. The repeated use of the “Jewels” motif in your title of each smaller piece within your collection conveys a particular theme which gives the first-time reader some imagery they would not otherwise envision. Given that your descriptions are clearly of personal feelings or clashing discourses, the “jewel” image evokes a perfect depiction of how that can feel; little tiny bits of your soul eating at you at times. Sometimes they can “sparkle” brightly, so I can definitely see why the “jewel” metaphor was used.
Each “Jewel” seems to discuss a particular feeling, which gives your collection a clear sense or organization. While some of the feelings you discuss, such as anxiety, sadness, or love can occur in many different combinations they are nevertheless still sometimes very much separate from each other. For instance, it is absolutely possible to feel sadness and love, or happeiness and anxiety at the same time.
The way you embody each feeling and describe it in great deal makes the experience all the more real and relatable for your readers. Anxiety attacks are never a pleasant experience and can frankly be absolutely terrifying. They can happen in any place and at any time and can ruin an otherwise pleasant moment. Similarly, when happieness can override negative feelings such as sadness or anger or grief, you feel as though you are on top of the world. Your word choice and imagery seems very well thought out, and as mentioned already makes the experience you are trying to describe all the more relatable for the reader.
I particularly appreciated your last piece, “Jewels of Feelings”, in which the analogy of a crown is used. Once again, imagery which is relatable to the reader is used, a crown glittering with various jewels. Since feelings and moods are all in one’s head, I found the analogy appropriate. The icing on the proverbial cake is undoubtedly the line explaining that, although we carry all of these jewels, we can only let one or a very few at most surface at any given time throughout the course of the day.
Overall, I very much enjoyed reading your collection and honestly can’t think of much else I would add. Being that I am not you, I cannot speak for you and don’t necessarily know where you are coming from, so overall I think your work is fairly good as it is. I didn’t observe any major spelling, grammar, punctuation, or syntax errors, so your collection is also well-written in that regard.
Naimy Schommer
I like your description of panic attacks–that provided a lot of insight for me!
Sierra Russell-McCollum
Jessica,
First off I have to say I loved the theme you picked when it came to the titles. The “Jewels of Feelings†was so incredibly clever. I low-key wish I thought of that. To me a jewel is something very unique and special, same has to go with feelings. The comparison of these two worked so well. They are two completely different things but you made it work.
Your first poem “Jewels of Anxiety†was written so well. I myself struggle with anxiety from time to time and I feel like you described it perfectly. People say it’s like butterflies but they are wrong. Like you said it feels like pounding drums. The way you described everything was so spot on. Anxiety can be hard t describe because it is so different for everyone, but you definitely described the basics so well. And the rhymes you through it worked so well together I was very pleased and impressed.
Your second poem “Jewels of Happiness†was so incredibly uplifting. The descriptions felt so real and were so relatable. This poem was like throwing out the bad and accepting happiness, finally letting it consume you. I loved this one so much. I had a smile on face the entire time I was reading this. I loved the line “ When you find the confidence to wear a smile.†I remember being a little girl and being so insecure, but the moment I gained confidence was powerful. The smile I wear now is true happiness and I loved how you put this into the poem because it is true happiness. This poem was definitely my favorite that you wrote.
Your next poem “Jewels of Sadness†was sad and I know that is the point of the poem. The way you described sadness was perfect. You included descriptions that were spot on and used that to your advantage. You have a way of making this emotion feel so real when you are reading this poem and that adds so much to it. This poem was definitely a hit for me.
Next was “Jewels of Loveâ€, this was very touching to me. The beginning when you said “Love is an unexplainable feeling†is the truest thing I have ever heard. It’s so hard to describe to someone why you love something. You just feel it in your heart. You just know. The way you described love sent butterflies in my stomach because everything was spot on and it makes me think of my significant other. The feeling is truly magical and you made that really clear. You explaining love was perfect. Even though love is unexplainable there is certain things that you can explain and I feel like you did a very good job at doing so.
Your last poem “Jewels of Feelings†was such a good way to wrap everything up. The way you compared feelings to jewels sitting on a crown was genius. We do wear our crown every day and only how a few jewels during certain days. The way you talk about this is so true. It was such a good way to put everything to an end. In the beginning, I was wondering if you were gonna do something like this, and I am very pleased that you did. After reading your poetry pack I am very satisfied. You did an outstanding job.
Aundrea Pierce
Jessica,
I like what you did with the theme of your collection! I wanted to know a little more about what inspired you personally; however, I get it if you didn’t want to share that. I struggle with anxiety so I could relate to “Jewels of Anxiety.†Anxiety impacts everyone differently, so it was interesting to see how it affects you. I do get the butterflies, a lot but I haven’t felt the thief in the night aspect of it. I like how you compare it to a thief. I don’t have much to say in regards to constructive criticism. The structure was good, the organization was spot on, the flow was good, and grammar and spelling didn’t interrupt me while reading. Maybe a little more rhyming? The kid in me loves the way rhyming helps you swing along the lines and have fun, so I’m a big fan of rhythm. On a different note, I also liked the way you made it clear what each of your pieces was about (the titles). I want transparency because I’m not talented in deciphering witty poems, so I appreciated this.
“Jewels of Sadness†got the most emotional response from me. This reminds me of how I felt when I experienced depression for the first time while I was in my third trimester of pregnancy. My husband was deployed, so I was by myself for a while and experienced exactly as you write “As the black cloud covers my head.†I named my black cloud “Henry,†so when a family member would call they’d ask, “how’s Henry doing?†Every word resonated with me and I could relate to every single line! I had no idea depression was a real thing, but you described it perfectly in this poem.
“The Jewels of Love†is very relatable. I enjoyed your word choices like “rattles,†and “stem.†I think you could have turned this into a comparison to love is like a garden. The words “butterflies,†“stem†made me imagine a garden scene.
The last piece “Jewels of Feelings†sums your collection up perfectly. What a cute comparison, I adore this poem! I can sense a struggle of anxiety and sadness through your writings, I just want to give you a big hug, but I wouldn’t because I’m socially awkward. You should keep up the poetry!
Michelle Cordova
Jessica,
I really thought there was something special about your poetry pack. I love how you picked one topic (feelings) and centered all of your poems around it. This made the entire pack flow and kept everything organized. Personally, I am not overly poetic so I appreciate the straight forward technique you used. Sometimes, with poetry, I feel that I spend so much time trying to decipher meanings that all I’m left with is questions and confusion, but in reading your poems, I didn’t feel that way at all! Your pack is a breath of fresh air, honestly!
My only critique, and it may be silly, would be to change things up a bit concerning style. In writing the original assignment, I was forced to break out of my comfort zone and research/write different styles of poetry so that my pack looked more exciting and less boxy, even if my poems weren’t all that great! Again, I’m not very poetic!
As far as the actual poems go, I love the feelings that you chose to write about and think you captured their truths beautifully. For starters, anxiety is one of those feelings that is difficult to explain, and the pain one feels from it is like no other, but your words help to put those feelings into perspective for those that don’t know what it’s like. The rest of the feelings along with your descriptions make the poems easy for others to relate to. Happiness, sadness, and love are feelings we are all aware of, to some extent, but I like the way you dig deeper into those feelings and make it easy for the audience to create images in their minds which mimic the poems.
Lastly, the way you tied everything together to form your last poem was brilliant! Human beings experience so many emotions over the course of one day, and those feelings and what we do with them, make us who we are as individual people and it’s something we should never be ashamed of. I like the metaphor you used in saying “All these feelings are jewels on a crown/We wear the crowns on a daily basis.†It was a great way to begin the last poem and close out your poetry pack as well as keep a clean, organized style throughout.
Overall, I felt that you put a lot of time and effort into choosing your topic and composing your lines. I enjoyed reading your collection and hope to read more of your work in the future!
Naimy Schommer
Jessica–
Anxiety
Love the image of the drum pounding–that’s a powerful image. I know lots of friends who have anxiety that can be hard to overcome. I’ve never experienced it too bad personally, but this poem gives a good image I can associate with anxiety. I was imaging someone who was really nervous for a presentation or public speech of some sort in a cold, nervous sweat with a pounding heart. Powerful stuff.
Happiness
This poem is different from the rest of your collection in that it doesn’t describe the actual feeling itself, but rather what you have to do or overcome to get to it. That’s an interesting way to make it stand out from the collection. I like this poem, but it has a more melancholy reading than I would assume a poem called “Jewels of Happiness†would have. It’s an interesting juxtaposition and I’m not entirely sure what meaning that gives to the poem. It’s a bold, creative choice nonetheless.
Sadness
“my head†is repetitive in lines 3 and 4. I suggest using a different image or rewording so that it flows more smoothly.
Love
I think its interesting how you boldly say “Love is an unexplainable feeling†and then immediately start to explain it in your own words. That gives a good contrast or juxtaposition. The phrase “unexplained feeling of love†is used in varying form 3 times. It’s a bit repetitive towards the end. I think the poem could benefit from switching it up a bit.
Feelings
I like how this poem ties all the others together and illustrates how we all have an arsenal of different feelings to work with. It’s a nice resolution.
Overall, I like this collection and how its tied together. I think these poems could benefit from some rewords and utilization of a few more senses. Keep writing! These are beautifully intertwined!
Monica Gallagher
Jessica,
Your collection was seemless and thoughtful! The title of “Jewels of Feelings” and carrying that throughout is such a great concept. I wanted to hear about all of the feelings, but I realize that this collection can only be so long. It reminded me of the cartoon movie about feelings, “Inside out”, and it made me wonder about what the feelings themselves would say. That may be something to explore at some point. The last poem tied everything together so well and was very inspirational. It makes you feel as though feelings are empowering instead of overwhelming.
“Jewels of Anxiety” was really realistic and relatable. “A thousand pounding drums on your heart”, makes me actually feel and hear it. This concept of describing these emotions would be super effective at spreading awareness about some of these emotions and concepts. Poetry is such a great tool for someone that is trying to understand what the other person is feeling or going through.
“Jewels of Happiness” is another insightful win of a poem. The last line ending in “happiness” is a good tie in for the rest of the poem. “And bid the frown you had on your face goodbye”, brings up a visual of actually waving the bad mood away. It surprises me how easy it is to create visual and feeling with such a small amount of words. I think because poetry is normally so short, it’s possibly easier to digest, making it more powerful? That and the pause, that naturally occurs, even when you’re attempting to read it fast. There’s a subconscious pause that happens automatically when you’re reading poetry that helps to create this other world of comprehension. It’s pretty amazing.
“Jewels of Sadness” is slightly depressing, but relatable. “Limping through the day” makes me laugh, but it really is not funny when it’s happening. Every emotion has it’s place and time. It would be helpful to appreciate each one in small doses and in a healthy way learn to dispense them out like little rays.
“Jewels of Love” is a good description of general love. “Erasing all other thoughts with the replacement of one” is a great line showing love as a mind take over.
“But only let certain jewels surface throughout the day”, this is huge for me. I think it’s a forgotten concept that would be helpful for people to remember. We all get so busy that we don’t realize what we have going on. It’s survival to a certain extent, but I think a lot of it, we could actually outlet more than we normally do. If we don’t release some of that pressure that can build up, we’re like little walking time bombs. Thinking of these jewels on our crowns and reminding ourselves to allow those to surface and shine is a concept that is very cool and much needed.
I honestly think this concept could be built into a therapeutic approach of some sort. Possibly doing a write up of the different thought processes of emotions and then using the jewel crown to explain the process and release of them. Good idea!
Katherine Whelchel
Jessica,
First of all, I loved the way each poem tied so beautifully into the other. Along with this, your topic of feelings was a wise choice because there are so many, and they are constantly streaming throughout us. Since your collection was very themed, I was also delighted by the similarity of the styles for each poem. At first, I wondered if you should have styled them each uniquely. Then, after reading, I realized the beauty and connection between the styles. As an overall analysis, I thought your poems were clear and well done. They were not super abstract, but they did hold a depth that is easily relatable.
I have currently been learning a lot about emotions and their power. As you put in “Jewels of Feeling”, we all have feelings, and they should not be ignored. I agree with this, however, I feel that it is also so important to realize that our emotions can lie to us. What we are feeling in a moment may not be accurate to the actual situation; it is important to recognize our emotions, but also evaluate if they are true to the situation, or if we’re just having a bad day and mad at everyone. My friend Naimy once said, “emotions are like children, you don’t want to stick them in the trunk, but you also don’t want to let them drive the car.” Our feelings are beautiful, and allow us to communicate our heart! Yet, they should not run our lives.
Because of the recent areas I have been learning about in regards to feelings, I really enjoyed reading your poems. You described each emotion well and gave me something to think about. “Jewels of Sadness” was especially relatable for me, because I also tend to search for the root of the sadness in hopes of making it better. Your picture of feelings being jewels was also beautiful! A very well put metaphor. You have done a wonderful job. I would encourage you to continue reading back through and finding different words you could change to increase the depth. Other than that, well done! 🙂
Aubri Stogsdill
Jessica,
I like how you organized your poems. Its very creative and unique! (:
In ‘Jewels of Anxiety, I loved the line that said, “Words that your lips can’t seem to expel,†This is exactly what anxiety feels like. It can make you freeze right where you are and hold you over a ledge. Its this thing you want and need to get rid of but you’re unable to let go… TOO REAL.
“Anxiety peaks when your undeniably weak,
It rushes in like a thief in the night,
A thief that steals pleasure and peace.â€
I think the last three lines were the best part of the poem.
‘Jewels of Happiness’ Was a nice one, while it is relatable and true, I didn’t enjoy this one as much. I think I like sad poetry for some reason, which is a characteristic that this poem doesn’t have.
‘Jewels of Sadness’ was a real emotional one. I like the line that said ‘The internal weeping begins,’ It think this is the sort of sadness that sits quietly and gnaws at you on the inside. The sort that makes people wonder whats wrong with you, but doesn’t worry them enough to ask. When you said “limping through the day,’ I instantly pictured a ragged homeless dog for some reason. Ears turned down.. dirty.. sad.
‘Jewels of feelings’ did a great job of wrapping up your collection. “Everyone bears the weight of different jewels,†was my favorite line in the poem. Feelings are something that everyone deals with. Each of us are living our lives and experiencing a plethora of different things. And yet we tend to only show the ‘jewels’ that we feel are the most attractive. We have this edited version of ourselves and part we are proud of and other parts that we are ashamed of. Each of these parts and feelings are still jewels, which are valuable regardless!
Great job! (:
Cassidy Kramer
Hello Jessica!
I absolutely love what you chose to write about. I also really like how you chose to make it into a “crown†that people wear. You chose something that is relatable to every reader, and you created a fun, easy, great poem.
In the “Jewels of Anxiety†poem, I liked how you expressed the feeling. The feeling of anxiety that dawns upon me before I am about to see a test score, an outcome that can only seem to come out negative, and many other little things throughout my day express the feelings that you explained in this poem.
I especially liked how you went along with the next poem “Jewels of Happinessâ€. All the words you said in it make total sense. I think that you said everything that is needed to be said and you also did not say too much.
I really like how you organize all the different feelings. First, you start with anxiety, then happiness, then sadness, then love, then putting them all together. I think that it sends the reader on an “emotional rollercoaster†and keeps them on their toes. In the poem “Jewels of Love†I like how you nicely interchanged the different types of love. Whether you meant to or not, you were able to let the reader see the different types of love. As one who has not loved a significant other, I could relate to the feelings of love for family, and long for the love of a spouse in that simple short poem.
I also really enjoyed the last poem “Jewels of Feelingsâ€. I liked how you put them all together and put them all on a crown that we all should wear proudly. You mentioned that we all have crowns and jewels, and different ones surface each day.
Overall, you displayed so much with saying so little, which for me is very hard to do. You involved imagery in your poem, and let the reader enjoyably relive each feeling. While reading, your words brought me back to the different times when I felt each feeling. This is a great collection, and I really liked the idea you decided to write about. Great job!
-Cassidy
CoelaGreen
I really like the subject manner of your poetry pack. The poems seem really simple and cute at first, but I like how you’re trying to normalize negative emotions. They’re just as valid and important as the positive ones that we bare, so why do we try and mask them? You do a really go job at bringing up this point without actually saying it, and it’s a really powerful message.
Overall, I like the style of your poetry. I like that each poem wasn’t exactly consistent, but they were similar enough to flow easily from jewel to jewel. Your writing is very to the point, and although the representation of emotions with jewels is a pretty image, your poetry was less focused on the prettiness of the words, and more on the concepts that you were trying to convey.
I really liked and related to each of your descriptive poems, but I do feel like this collection could be made to be even more beautiful and powerful if more imagery and more abstract similes were incorporated into each of your poems. This is only a suggestion though, and of course everyone’s style is different. You did an amazing job with this collection, and I really enjoyed the simplicity and innocence in your description.
If I had to choose a favorite, i’d have to choose “Jewels of Love,†but the collection was made with your last poem: “Jewels of Feelings.†It really tied everything together and had me saying “Ohhh, that’s the point of emotions being expressed as jewels! That’s really cool and powerful.†I hope that’s what you intended!
Anyways, great job! Keep writing, you’re very talented.
Mekayla
*** That response is me. I don’t know who’s account I was accidentally logged into lol
I really like the subject manner of your poetry pack. The poems seem really simple and cute at first, but I like how you’re trying to normalize negative emotions. They’re just as valid and important as the positive ones that we bare, so why do we try and mask them? You do a really go job at bringing up this point without actually saying it, and it’s a really powerful message.
Overall, I like the style of your poetry. I like that each poem wasn’t exactly consistent, but they were similar enough to flow easily from jewel to jewel. Your writing is very to the point, and although the representation of emotions with jewels is a pretty image, your poetry was less focused on the prettiness of the words, and more on the concepts that you were trying to convey.
I really liked and related to each of your descriptive poems, but I do feel like this collection could be made to be even more beautiful and powerful if more imagery and more abstract similes were incorporated into each of your poems. This is only a suggestion though, and of course everyone’s style is different. You did an amazing job with this collection, and I really enjoyed the simplicity and innocence in your description.
If I had to choose a favorite, i’d have to choose “Jewels of Love,†but the collection was made with your last poem: “Jewels of Feelings.†It really tied everything together and had me saying “Ohhh, that’s the point of emotions being expressed as jewels! That’s really cool and powerful.†I hope that’s what you intended!
Anyways, great job! Keep writing, you’re very talented.
Corbin Knapp
Jessica, I really enjoyed the unique form of your collection. The method of comparing feelings to jewels is an amazing idea that made your collection stand out to me. I also enjoyed how you continued to use the unique simile that feelings are like jewels throughout the whole collection.
“Jewels of Anxiety†is an interesting poem that is a great take on the feeling of anxiety. “Anxiety is not what it seems, No rush of blood fills your body, Nor But rather a thousand pounding drums on your heart Making you feel vulnerable and heavy.†I enjoyed this line because there are many different kinds of anxiety and it feels different for every person. For you it feels like pounding drums in your heart as you described in the line, but for me it is feeling vaguely sick to my stomach. Another simile you used in this poem that I liked was, “It rushes in like a thief in the night, A thief that steals pleasure and peace.†This is a great simile that captures the feeling of anxiety perfectly.
“Jewels of Happiness†is another poem that I enjoyed in your collection. You continue to use great similes throughout the poem including, “When You finally open your eyes to the beautiful world, That is when you feel the wonderful sensation: Happiness. “ The way I interpret this is in order to be happy we must open our hearts and minds to the world. Is this what you were going for? “Jewels of Sadness†Also had some good lines like, “Sadness fills my heart and darkness blanks my mind, The internal weeping begins, As the black cloud covers my head.†and, “All that was beautiful now seems dead.†These are very powerful poems, and I enjoyed reading them.
“Jewels of Love†and “Jewels of Feelings†are great poems for the end of your collection, and I enjoyed how you used your last poem to tie it all up as well. “Jewels of Love†did not flow as well as the other poems in my opinion, but it still had a very emotional feel to it. It was a little choppy in some parts. “Love is an unexplainable feeling Something that creates butterflies in your tummy.†You use great words in this line, but it doesn’t flow together, and instead is more of a anecdote.
“Jewels of Feeling†was a great poem for the conclusion, because you restated your simile that feelings are like jewels. “All these feelings are jewels on a crown, We wear a crown on a daily basis.†This is a great line, but just like “Jewels of Love†it is a little choppy in its structure, the only thing I could think of that you could improve on is making your poems flow together more smoothly. Something else that might make your poems even better is to use different kinds of jewels for different emotions. Like comparing a ruby to the feeling of love.
Caitlyn Williams
Jessica,
I loved the format of your poetry collection! I think it was both clever and powerful to write about feelings in the terms of jewelry. Emotions are important and valuable like jewelry, I appreciate this. I liked how you explained how anxiety affects you. It affects everyone in different stages, and it sounds like you struggle with heavy anxiety. I struggle with anxiety, so it’s nice to see an expression of it in jewels.
I really appreciated the guidance I felt in your poetry. The thoughtfulness through out your collection really makes this a great piece! Jewels of Happiness was especially great. I loved the guidance and support that braid through this poem. You end it so simply, yet so beautifully.
Overall you did an amazing job, I dont see any improvement needed! Your concluding poem Jewels of Feeling really tied up the collection well. I love the message I am receiving from this collection, be confident and don’t be afraid to show your feelings, they are powerful!
Ben Knapp
I really enjoyed reading your poetry, and I thought your theme of wearing emotions as jewel on a crown was really good. The poetry makes use of a lot of literary devices such as metaphors, yet there where never any points where I thought I couldn’t understand what you where talking about. The language perfectly balanced concrete images and abstract ideas to create some really good poetry.
Your first poem, “Jewels of Anxiety,†perfectly represents the feeling of nervousness. The poem not only discredits the common metaphors that are used to describe anxiety, such as “butterflies in the stomach,†but it also establishes its own, more definite metaphors to describe it. These metaphors do a good job connecting with the reader, and anyone who has ever been in a position in which they where uncomfortable will know what you mean when you describe “a thousand pounding drums on your heart.â€
The next poem, “Jewels of Happiness,†seemed to focus mainly on overcoming sadness. Although this is certainly a valid theme, I would have liked to see a little more on the happiness itself, rather than what it replaces. Perhaps a line or two more describing how you feel when you are happy would make the poem feel a little more cheerful, and, ultimately, better convey your feelings to the reader.
The third poem, “Jewels of Sadness†was mostly a good poem. The metaphors that you used were very good, and the reader definitely can relate with your strong emotional descriptions. After all this, you bring an uplifting turn at the end as you acknowledge that the sadness described in the poem is not permanent. The only thing I don’t like about the poem is how you used the word “head†twice in a row. This may seem like only a little thing, but it breaks up the flow of the poetry, and ruins a bit of its effect. If you removed the repeated word, the reader will be able to fully appreciate your poem.
Your next poem, “Jewels of Love,†is also really good. I find it interesting that you return to the idea of “butterflies in the stomach†after you refute it as an accurate description of anxiety in an earlier poem. However, it does serve to support your previous statement by describing what you think that feeling actually represents. Nevertheless, I may be reading too much into a simple phrase. Either way, the poem is good and fits in well with the rest of your work.
The last poem, “Jewels of feelings,†ties all your poems together with the metaphor of someone’s feelings being a crown, and individual emotions being jewels on that crown. This wraps up your collection very nicely, and is a very good poem in itself.
Altogether, I think your poetry was very good. The way you had all the poems tie together was a very nice touch and your metaphors were strong and meaningful. Other than a couple odd spots, the flow of your poetry was also excellent, which helps keep the reader’s focus throughout the collection. I highly enjoyed reading it.